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posted 15th May 2019, 12:32 PM

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15th May 2019, 12:32 PM

catlamp

Comments and criticisms are appreciated :D

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15th May 2019, 2:50 PM

Haegan2005

You did a good job of showing that they both have high strength, but miss mouse seems to be more highly mobile and, frankly, stronger. Perhaps even notably faster.

The feel of the villain is that he is content, so long as there is a fight. Even if it is a little one sided. He just wants to be taken seriously and she realized that.

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15th May 2019, 10:04 PM

catlamp

Thank you, everything seems to be getting across so far :)

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15th May 2019, 4:58 PM

chris-tar

I think you should either post these as two separate pages, or, put the second page underneath the first one so that it reads a little more logically.
Otherwise I think mega mouse is really cute and cool.

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15th May 2019, 10:05 PM

catlamp

I'll post them individually from now on, thank you

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